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Morgan Le Fay
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PostSubject: A time to cry   A time to cry Icon_minitimeSun Aug 05, 2007 8:05 am

A time to cry

Blessed with a voice
I find myself silent
Breathing beneath them
The call of mankind.

Blessed I would be
If I only had courage
If I would be likable
If I would be more.

Yet I find myself stranded
Alone without a word
‘cause the great voice has spoken
‘cause I’ve been unheard.

So I walk along,
Blessed with nothing else
Than a clean state of mind
And a competence to myself.
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PostSubject: Re: A time to cry   A time to cry Icon_minitimeSun Aug 05, 2007 8:09 am

Not sure what to think of this one.
I think the subject is good..
It's not your best work.

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Did you change?
I did too
Love can grow from the last grain..


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PostSubject: Re: A time to cry   A time to cry Icon_minitimeSun Aug 05, 2007 8:19 am

Overal it ain't your best work indeed
but i really love the second part.

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When I put my hand between your legs
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PostSubject: Re: A time to cry   A time to cry Icon_minitimeSun Aug 05, 2007 8:47 am

I guess this one is more written in an emotional state. Thanks for the comments.
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